by NapalmHeat
And you say this is your first? Excellent story line, believable characters, believable situation. Surely you have done some writing before. Now, where do you take this situation in the next episode? Hope to read it soon.
I can without a doubt say this is my favorite, (proven by the fact it's the only one I've liked enough to comment on), an excellent set up of characters and plot, you should be very proud if this is your first and I'm very much looking forward to more from you
I have to believe given the level of detail that there is some reality behind this!