All Comments on 'Sex, Cars, Dinah'

If it was your goal to turn on readers, it worked. You're not much of a writer--if I was a professor the essay would get a D+ at best. But the sex was terrific and makes you sound like the hottest guy in school. Why did that preacher's kid give it up to you so easy? This was so good I wish it was true!

Yeah, it wasn't really much of a turn on for me, and the resolution at the end was terrible. Erotic fiction is still fiction and you still have to follow the rules like setting up motivation, character, plot, just with lots of sex to balance it out.