by Peterspeter
I wish you had left the other story alone. This has cheapened the character developed as Thuy. It has also lessened Carl's character.
Why is this part of your "Sex Club for Nerds and Geeks" story? It has nothing to do with that story what so ever. How hard is it to name this something else? Seriously.
I am not even going to touch how you have slowly butchered a great story...