by completeexperience
I like the buildup and the outcome. reminds me of a matching fantasy I have of one of my older female cousins. Even at my age I still fantasize about her. These two buddies will do well.
M not really into foot fetish but your story was f-amazing!!! I was so turned on by this too. I like to know when your next story will come out. I'm really hoping soon.
Just wondering as to why a exclamation mark was used after almost every normal speech line. Were they shouting every conversation for everyone to hear? Took me out of the moment so I couldn't enjoy it.
First of all, thanks to the two compliments above. As for the criticism, the two characters aren't shouting at each other. I put the exclamation points for the reader to envision them grinning widely and being extremely happy in each other's presence.