by wonderpants
Totally erotic first two chapters. Almost like being in the room with them . Please continue the adventures of Alyana.Thank you x
Both of these stories were very well written. You definitely should continue to explore these themes and express them in additional chapters of this series and / or in other stories.
There were a few stray typos, but otherwise the writing was some of the best I've found on this site. Grammar and syntax was very good and the conversation & description of the thoughts of the characters were excellent. The chain of events and telling of the story was well paced.
Sensational n sensual writing. Did Mark finally married Ana? I hope n guess No. Loved yur simple erotic display of emotion. Great. Keep writing.
PS. I not checked yur nmae or profile yet, but u must be a lady just wishing to be like Ana. Xoxox.