All Comments on 'Sexy Deal Ch. 01'

MORE!!! ^.^

That's it ?? No ending ?? Poor job of not finishing something you started.

No story ending, therefore no story. I rated you a '00' for this.

Got nothing better to do than leave discouraging comments for authors I guess. This is not a bad start, since I see it is listed as Chapter One. Maybe the two other readers didn't see that in their zeal to give you a zero! My only critique is to try to paint more of a picture, use more dialogue, show what their inner thoughts are.

Based on the two comments from the moron twins, I can only assume they read the first chapter of a novel and think you're read the entire book.

Chapters tend to be a bit longer than 750 words, but this was well-constructed. I'm waiting impatiently for the next one. Great writing style! Only one "glaring" error. Keep going!

So whats the deal?, Very bad ending.

I am becoming tired of reading comments from people that are not constructive. It saddens me that instead of complimenting someone for their work, these literary critics slam honest efforts.

Please continue with another chapter.

Don't worry... more is definitely on the way and the next ones will be longer. I'm currently working on chapter 2. As for the shortness of this one, I was setting up the story. Trust me... you'll see what I mean in the long run. The title is "Sexy Deal"... I guess after Ch. 01 I should've added "Intro" or something. Anyway, the "Deal" is the story, as you'll soon see. Thanks to the few with positive comments. I don't mind negative comments. I find a way to put a constructive spin on them and usually give the posters of negative comments the benefit of the doubt.

I realized I left a cliff-hanger. That's part of writing in "parts". You want people to keep reading, right? I'll try to leave the ends a little more solidified in the future, but I'm still going to try and leave you wanting to know what happens next.

Looking forward to chapter 2.

Even though it is a short story it develops well and fast and leaves a lot to the imagination. Hope to see part 2 soon. Thanks, Bob

Wheres part two please.

Part 2 is pending... so hopefully it should be up soon, just to let you all know. Sorry it took so long. Part 3 shouldn't take nearly as long to get up. I just had a temporary case of writer's block. Chp 2 is also longer, so... hope you guys like it. It kinda gets really kinky, so who knows if it'll keep your interest.