All Comments on 'Shadows in the Dark'

Rubbish

As a previous comment reads: Rubbish. Or garbage. Or simply "junk" or even "waste". As in a "waste of time". Time which we, the readers, will never get back.

What's a man hood?

You have a great story, but you do need to work on your grammar. Try reading it aloud. I think that will help you see your mistakes. Also, get a good editor. Even the great writers of our time need editing. It is the nature of the beast.

Sorry if i didn't notice the grammatical errors, i just loved the story.

I wonder what new dark god has been birthed 'this' night, and what other will come in 9 months...

If they're right. Grammer and spell checking are important. Good luck. Hope to read more in this vein, if not this story.

Remember all you critics these are AMATEUR writers. The are prone to mistakes like anybody else. If you had wrote this story wouldn't you want positive comments? Just because a few errors were made does not make this a bad story.

Personally I hope there's a part two and beyond. This could be a great story if people that want perfect stories don't read it.

I agree that you people really need to realize that these are first time writers and are prone to mistakes. All in all this is a really good story line. I really enjoyed it. I hope you give us more of this story. I would get myself an editor though to help with some little issues.

new writers that have read any stories here SHOULD KNOW THAT READERS COMPLAIN ABOUT STUPID ERRORS AND THEY ALWAYS SAY TO USE A GOOD EDITOR. I WONDER WHY NEWISH WRITERS DON'T LISTEN TO THE READERS ? THIS NOT THIS IDIOTS FIRST STORY IT IS HIS FOURTH OR FIFTH TIME ENOUGH FOR HIM TO KNOW BETTER THAN TO POST A STORY IN THIS CONDITION.

I don get some of these comments. The ones calling this story bad. I mean if you don't like the way the story is going then stop reading very simple there is an x for a reason use it. Personally though loved the story a few errors I noticed but hardly impacted the story.

doesn't have to be TRASH WRITING, some amatures are good others use EDITORS.

Excellent, Thank you! I am going to your site now. I hope for follow on stories.

We see that Damian was described as once a gentle caring person,willing to help his fellow man and woman,but after he found his wife Veronese it was like he turned into some kind of monster hell-bent on ultimate revenge for their disregard to help him when he needed it the most.

Veronese who we thought was innocent and was raped and beaten was fully consentual and was a Pain Junkie who can't orgasm without pain.

Sarah Lee Damian's little sister is a cold calculating bitch who also can read minds and can use telepathy to get shit to move.But Sarah Lee is also madly in love with her brother Damian and seems to want Damian all to herself.

Now as we find out when Sarah Lee tells Damian that she can kill Veronese no problem,but she also said that they could just set her free to go out and enjoy all the pain-filled sex she wants with others.But surprisingly we find out Sarah Lee is bisexual and I think she wants to make Veronese a sexslave to her,but about Damian as he used to be,would he be able to inflict pain on his Wife like that?.Finally with Damian and Sarah Lee we find out that when he came inside his Sister they both felt something change in them like magic or more specifically sex magic,so does that mean they are like sex demons who live off sex?