All Comments on 'Shadows of Resentment'

This is a good start to what will probably be a great story. The only thing that was confusing was the jumping around of the time - but I know that that is a device writers use all the time (it just confuses me sometimes, lol). Keep up the great work & I look forward to more submissions on this story!

Congrats!

A fine start to a grand story IR2R!

I'm really liking this story Great start for your writing and I can't wait to read the next installment.

congrarz on posting your first chapter. it was excellent and i can hardly wait for your next offering

Great start so far and I cannot wait to see what you have in store for us next.

But do watch out for typos and minor grammer mistakes that could really take away from the writting.

You sure don't want to have any grammer [sic] mistakes that could take away from the writting [sic]!

The only issue is the tallest person on a basketball team is never as short as 6 feet tall. More like 6'10"

I enjoyed reading your story. Cannot wait to see how it unfolds. I am loving Cam and the Granger boys.

Good character development which should make for a very good story! Good job.

including smiles and feelings. TK U MLJ LV NV p/s for you 1st time pretty good chapter. more to follow mlj

If Sierra is the youngest (18), how old are her brothers? They would have to be at least 19, why are they still in highschool? Confusing.

The boys clowned around in junior high school and ended up repeating a grade.

I definitely agree with Quietmahoganystorm, the jumping around was really confusing. I like the idea of your story but it was hard to get into it with it all over the place.

Did a toddler write this story?

Excuse me, but you can be19 and a senior,if yoour birthday is after september 1.That is unimportant. What I want to know is what caused the falling out between the friends? ..GOOD. STORY! I HAD NO PR OBLEMS FOLLOWING IT!

on your first story. I know I'm really late to this party. I don't remember how I first heard of you, but what I heard was good. When I saw chapter 2 of Out of the Shadow posted today I thought hey I can jump into this story. Well here I am at the beginning of the whole thing. I like this chapter and hope to start to catching up. Again I know it's rather late but I wish to congratulate you on your first story on Lit.

The concept of this story is actually a good one. I love stories about the brother's best friends falling in love with the baby sister, but the rest of it...no. I'm sorry for this comment, but I feel like someone in middle school wrote this. It's jumping all over the place and frankly, it's boring. And to the people about to jump all over my comment, you all can suck it because this story isn't very good. Iread2relax, just keep practicing and I'm sure with the help of a good editor and someone to give you honest feed back, you will go very far. But this story is not good. I love the concept though.

LOL! Sorry, I thought that was funny.

Off to read chapter 2. I want to know the secret.

This story seemed to jump around a lot. One minute they were in the car, then they were at a party and then Cam had broken up with his girlfriend.