All Comments on 'Shaving My Flatmate's Legs'

I think that your editor let you down, however. The puncuation usage is horrible, especially the constant usage of periods after the dialogue. An example is the following sentence, which should have a comma after the word nurse.

"Put some moisturiser on my breasts please, nurse." she requested.

Revealing tale. I'd like to read a sequel about Tan getting her muff fleeced.

love to read part 2.

Awesome story and very well written. I felt like I was standing there watching the events unfolding right before my eyes...