All Comments on 'She Calls Me Daddy'

You need to Learn English better, get an editor, or lean how people actually talk.

The poor grammar was jarring to say the least. I gave you three because you made the effort.

I thought it was pretty good. Some errors but that's OK. Still has me wet.

the rule ass to pussy a no no ass to mouth a big no no pussy to mouth ok pussy to ass ok, not a bad story

Another wank story, but awkwardly told. Is English your first language? If not, congratulations for your effort! But if so, shame on you! It just makes for some difficult reading, although I seldom criticize these stories for that.

But needs work. I agree with the others that you're not a native American speaker. That can be dealt with. Get an editor. Smooth things out. My poinion this is a rehash of the stereotypical dad/dau incest story. Nothing new.

2 stars for the effort.

DragonRider55

The atrocious ESL throughout makes this barely readable - and definitely non-erotic!

Extra 'S's! How many buttS does a person have? I have 1, which makes it a butt... and in the throws of passion, you don't pull someone's hairS, you pull hair. It's one of those words that can be used as a plural, as well.

It could have been a great story. But all the miss spelling and improper use of words killed it.

I did love the story line though. The BUTTS SHOULD HAVEBEEN SINGULAR AS IN BUTT.

You need a spell checker bad.

Not much, really. No story, just a lot of poorly worded sexual encounters. "hairs"? "butts". No rhythm to it, no momentum... Not much of anything entertaining. A two at best.