All Comments on 'She is as Horny as I am'

I liked this story it had a lot of potential. The only problems I had was how you formatted the story. This is a short story not a script when you started all those lines with, "Angie:". It kills any potential flow and rhythm that you may be building. Keep up the good work because you have a lot of potential I can not wait to read more from you in the future.

If you can't write dialog and a story-line in a free-flowing manner, then just give it up; no-one wants to read a script for a sex-story, it's too damned distracting. Writing dialog with an explanatory sentence before as to who is speaking, expression on their face etc is a lot more convincing than this cod play-format. No stars

I LIKE your story. I like the idea of Angie and the mom to come (cum).

I would suck your cock while you write this story if you lived near Chicago. Nice work. You keep writing, I'll keep jacking off.

Ya want to know who's a really pain in the ass? Asshole who can't stand it when others dare to have a different opinion.

I hope that they can involve mom in their affair and he gets to fuck both his mom and his sister.

Thanks for the read

it is a simple and good story keep up the good work

Sorry about the dialog structure. I'm not a dumbass and I actually did graduate from high school, so I'll respond to the criticism and not do that again. Also, one guy even took the time to send me an email telling me that he gives an automatic rating of one when a multi-part story does not indicate "Chapter 1". I didn't even know people scored stories, but anyway I'll make sure the next one says "Chapter 2".

Hey, at least I didn't give the guy a 13" dick or something. :) Thanks for the feedback.

This is almost exactly what I'm looking for in a woman now. I think the story was well written and structured. I can't wait for another chapter your going on my favorite Arthur list. Keep up the good stories

Josh's kid sister Angie loves having men shoot their loads all over her, on her face, her tits, and her pretty little twat. Her big brother Josh is the perfect complement to her. What he loves to do is jerk his big hard cock and blow his hot young balls all over women. Angie gets super-hot when she discovers that Josh can spray his sperm 5 or 6 times a day. She gives Josh carte blanche to come and find her whenever he feels like unloading his brotherly balls and just drench her. To stimulate him, Angie shows her brother her tits and her cute little cunt. Josh really likes that and takes careful aim at her sweet sisterly slit. This sibling couple were made for each other. Soon no doubt the boy'll be exploring that sweet slit with his stiff fat cock and giving her his sperm injections from the inside. Josh is endlessly horny and endlessly hard, and he knows his mother has a really interesting hairy hole between her legs, it's the same wonderful hole he came out of. Ron's faithful readers are wondering when Josh'll get to plug that hole and share some of his super-abundant semen with his beloved mom.

...of this dumb piece of garbage.

I am male, 23 married to a very beautiful girl.

The whole tale made a farce out of sex of the loving kind.

The oaf who wrote it should be strung-up from a tree branch from his tiny prick.

I can't wait for Chap 2 when Josh fucks Angie in her sweet tight asshole!

Why shouldn't 2 people with the same genes have a similar sex drive? For them to have the same perversion is exciting to think about. Thanks for not having a 10 inch cock and DD tits. Now let's see what mommy and her friends get into maybe they got their kink from her side of the family. I'm sure a few readers will want you to get into sex and likely anal, everyone it seems is into anal for some reason, just don't forget the theme of your story so far, while it's quite likely that having such close contact physical intimacy is bound to happen it's mostly a Voyeur Exhibitionist story and very pleasant read. Thank you

Is this story set 20-30 years ago? Otherwise I can't understand how there can be an adult theater still in business where this sort of thing takes place in. Just dumb.

There are lots of theaters like that where women go and do exactly what Angie is doing. There are three within an hour of where I live, and it can lead to hot times.

My wife became a total slut for her brother, she was his to use as he wished. He loved to show her off in public and sometimes would even share her with friends.

Me:

Angie:

Me:

Angie:

This is how you write the lines in a play. It is NOT how you write dialog in a short story. In doing so, you've shown either you aren't aware of the conventional way of writing a story, or you're incapable of doing that in a competent manner.

Which is it?

Get in touch with reality. Fantasy is cool but unbelievability sucks. And, yes, that means that you suck. Sorry for my bluntness? Noooooo. Please kill yourself. Have a shitty day. )c:

Wow I thought this story was great I think u have enough you can write a few chapters

Great story! Keep up the good work!

You had to use the whore of a sister cliche. Sorry stopped reading this garbage when sis was at the theater getting cummed on by every guy. Fucking garbage

This could in realety end up in pregnancy... You dont need penetration... Ya they can climb into holes.....