by Daqusa
I love the way the story unfolds, moving the reader along with ease. I can close my eyes and imagine myself in the place of the barmaid seducing this young man....very erotic.
I loved the story, very well written, very erotic, very believable. Can't wait to read more from you.
So very erotic, beautiful details and vivid lovemaking. A warm, sensuous ride and perfectly done. Great work!
are the best and you did justice in writing about it!
Great job! Can't wait to read more of your work!
Honey
Very good story. It really looked like you put quite some thought into it to make it as "realistic" as possible.
I applaud you. Keep up the good work.
I love first stories.......loved this one.....a 5 all the way......Dawn
A detailed and focussed erotic vignette, well set up, taken to its logical conclusion.
Excellent first, both ways.