All Comments on 'Shepherd's Pie Ch. 03'

you started off the story with a lot of promise but now it isn't even incest anymore 1*

I completely respect that opinion. I realize some people won't agree with my decision to go back in time. The next chapter goes back to the mother/son relationship. Still I wanted to expand this world more and also wanted a chance to write about something different and also narrate from another point of view. I'm sorry if it doesn't work for everyone but hopefully some readers will enjoy it.

I appreciate all feedback. Thank you.

didnt like the twist to story, lost the incest. what I thought held promise, I now am not sure anymore,

Are you sure this submission is in the correct genre? Sorry I didn't feel like voting. I just think I may have lost interest. Suggestion: Rewrite and resubmit; then you have me back. The series started out great but to remain great and have good readership interest, the continuity has to be considered important as well.

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I don't need it to be incest, I just need it to be interesting. Bad storyline and bad dialogue just killed it. How can I be voting 5* for chapter 1 and 1* for this?

In hindsight, maybe this chapter didn't work. All I can do is learn from it. For those who did enjoy it, thank you for the support.

To show that side of her is cool except taking her to a pimp is a little pathetic--finishing with the young guy was cool--it as also sad making a little racist out of it--outside that small detail it was a well written story