All Comments on 'She's All That Ch. 07'

One word...Awesome!!!! I wish a girl would treat me like this :)

The plot was good, but could have had more details by the end with them sleeping. Also, you need to revisit semicolon usage. They are stronger than a comma but weaker than a period. Also, a comma is needed before names: "Let's go to bed, Malaya." Not " Let's go to bed Malaya." The 1st sentence is directed to Malaya, the 2nd a command to a group to go to a bed named Malaya. Good work overall.