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Click hereThe moment he grabbed the man around his neck, and flung him off the screaming began.
"AAAAAHHHHHH OOOOOOOHHHHHHH My Mr. Russoe what the fuck are you doing?"
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 8 years agoDid you go to school . If you did you seemed to have missed english classes.
Anonymousabout 10 years agoyou need an EDITOR,BADLY.Is english not you first language?I like the story,but makes it a bit hard to read thru all the errors...keep writing,,,but please,get some help..
Anonymousover 10 years agoI'm really enjoying the plot so far, but I think you need to proof read before you post. This kinda painful to read with the bad grammar. Sorry if this is harsh
Anonymousover 10 years agothis story has sooo much potential but it's quite painful to read..i find myself making things up as I go just to try to make it make at least a little sense..i dunno how much farther ima make it..normally I don't nit pick at authors to get editors, I can deal with grammar issues pretty easily but seriously have u read over this story before u put it up?
Anonymousover 10 years agoI tried, I really did. But this is just too painful to read, get an editor to help you with all the grammar, punctuation and missing words or just wrong words used. 1*
Anonymousover 11 years agoI started reading this a while back, but life started playing hard and had to chill for a minute. This has tremendous spark, but you needed an editor to tweak the small ripples in flow. It has been a bit distracting at times. I still dig your premise though and this time will complete the story.
Thanks chick!!
Arielualmost 12 years agoGreat story... Forget the horrible things that people write. Those that an Do, those that can't criticise. Keep it up!!!
Queen_Vickialmost 12 years agoAuthorthank you Mimirose, for that comment, and for defending me. I was going to say something to that jerk off, but decided against it. And, no sadly I have bad news for you chapter 3 of Shifting Hearts will probably be the shortest of them all, but good news it will be the only one. I am busy right now with Dark Serenity for my DS fans, and after that I am going to do SH. Again, Thank you, and thank you to everyone that has commented.
