All Comments on 'Shorting the Heart'

Not bad man keep it up!

Good and hot story when Mama enters the picture. But is definitely unfinished, needs more chapters.

Come on. Let Rosa also join the fun.

Other than some typos... great job!

He's posting her cheaper than any prostitute ever, no benefits and getting Labour on top of that but feels cheated because she isn't as skilled at bjs and has a boyfriend who went support his kid? How the fuck did this idiot get where he is? The real business world would eat him alive, spit him out, and make sure he never works again begins he's so incredibly stupid that he has to break the law instead of getting a real girlfriend who can actually give good bjs for free.

Done with this. It's bad enough reading a story about a black man written by a white author pretending he knows how Black people talk.

Nah bruh you gotta continue this series!! We the people demand it

Don't know if you're still an active writer on here but this is sheer excellence. Please continue this story in the same context to which it has leaned towards this far .