All Comments on 'Show Moms Ch. 01'

hot oh so hot,cant wait till you have more to tell

It starts off great, just hope you keep it up. Need to describe Becca and how she looks

This could be a real good or great storyline. i am eagerly anticipating the next one and hope that you take all the avenues that this story could possibly take, i know it'll be great. hurry up!

Great storyline. Really looking forward to the next part.

not enough action

good start....hope there is alot more!!!! and included the mom!!!!!

I'm intrigued... Please spend lots of time on describing Becca and Mom - I'm dying to read about all the really hot outfits the 'handler' chooses!

Not bad, for a start. Please continue and we'll all have several happy endings...ha ha..

Fully develop the physical contact and explore the relationships between the three main characters. Make us see and feel all the nuances - with your talent is should be no problem.

I'm glad I didn't get here earlier. I hate to wait for the next chapter. Gotta go read the next one.

An anon

one of your stories that I have read,but if you are good enough for Sweet Witch you are good enough for me!Excellent(if unusual)story.

OK, It's a good premis for a tale, but my only question would be; what in the world was his Mom thinking? "Humm, what's that Becca, oh the national MILF contest? Sure, you can use my son, after all he's got his ten incher and should be easy to manipulate. Hell, he is a seventeen year old boy, how tough could it be?" --- So, could Mommy Dearest have an ulterior motive here? Just a little incest vibe coming down the road? Stay tuned for futher 'Notes-R-Us'. :) ---BTW: Writing technicals were excellent!

There seems to be a Literotica problem (no place at bottom to rate story) and there appears to be some missing text as the story line jumps between chapter 1 and chapter 2.

Great! The tale is very humorous.

Great story telling .....slowly building up the suspense. A very hot theme that isn't too common

Watch your grammar, though - it ought to have been "Or maybe we both had."

What a wonderful idea for a story. I also like the great humor.

Looking forward to reading more.

Not liking many of the current story crops, I've been re-reading some classics from my lurking days before I registered an account. MarshAlien's novellas usually have far-fetched premises and this is no different. But his writing is above average with compelling characters and plot. If one suspends disbelief for the premise, then the sex comes across as both hot and believable. Show Moms and A Stitch in Time are 2 of my favorite MarshAlien series and 2 of my favorite Literotica novellas. Worth the slow build-ups, folks!

If it lives up to even half the potential it should be a fun story

Excellent start.

Handler and milf

Does she really qualify at her age?

Milf age bracket?

I would probably go from at least mid 30s to sky the limit

"There's a national MILF show? Count him in!"

Yeah, well, count me in too!

Great premise. And plausible origin story. who else would think of this but a bunch of horny highschoolers