All Comments on 'Show Your Tits, Show Your Tits Ch. 02a'

I liked it. The sex was hot. I was hoping for a three way with the college girl guide or a four way with Katana and her son. Nice alternative ending, though.

You built up a story line with Katana and her son then just let it drop.

I did set up some ideas that I left unexplored, but figured they could be the subject of another chapter if there was enough interest in the story.

A nicer ending

A nicer ending yes - a more popular ending, definitely, but not a better ending. The original ending was more challenging, it made readers uncomfortable but it was a much better story for that.

I appreciate your taking the time to send you thoughts on the alternative endings to Show Your Tits.

all the way. nicely done.

Everyone to their tastes, but the whole “cuckolding” bit tends to get a little old. This ending seemed happier all the way around. Nicely done.

The first version presented a nice intro to cuckolding but that direction was ultimately limiting. The alternate route was a nice turn into other directions, many more possibilities. I agree with you that Katana and her son would be better worked in later as a foursome or mutual exhibitionism. Great work. Hope you revisit the piece and continue it, lots of possibilities with college kids, professors and parents. If you don't, that will be fine as well, the story ended nicely tied up. Must try some more of your work. Thanks.

Were good but 2a was a more respectable way of ending the Marriage.

I liked this ending better. Left it open for more storylines and let Dad off the hook. That whole cuckhold thing just bothers me.

Nope. First one is better. I liked some of this alternate but, it didn't move me. Maybe if I read this one first. Still a great story. I like your writing.

This ending is much better. I know that some people find 'cuckold' sexy, but I am certainly not one.

Even if it's fantasy, this is kind of a happy ending and nobody gets destroyed.

I like this ending much much better. It leaves more additional chapters if desired and everyone is happy. I love it!!!!! Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading more of your sutff.

All I'll say is that this ending was a [little] better than the 'original' ending.

Chapter 2a is better than Chapter 2 ending...but I would have preferred Bruce getting in shape with assistance from his wife, resulting in renewal of their sex life and marriage...Jacob hooking up with Jill...eventually getting married to her...but every year Jacob and mom have an anniversary encounter in New Orleans.

This was a much better ending than the first one. Making him a cuck in the first version didn't connect, we didn't see anything like that in the whole story. Giving him Betty in this version worked. great story

Like most everyone else, I think this was a much better version then the original.

(11/8/2022) Well.., this was more humane.., more hubby friendly.., I guess. Definitely sexier than the original ending, IMO. But it just felt rushed to me. Jill at the Daisy Dukes contest and Katana and Michael’s antics on the drive back could have been expanded upon. There was enough ammunition added here for a third chapter, IMO. Maybe I’m just greedy.

LOL. A guilt souvenir? That's the GREAT IDEA for fixing that crashing ball of catastrophe that was Chapter 2? Great. Now it's a crashing PLANET of catastrophe, only with a sadface smiley slapped on. Geezus. ASSTR authors were so much better at this.

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Just read this for the first time and I have to say the alternate ending isn't as good as the planned ending. It's fan service, true, but it also became quite unreal. The bit with Jill and Kat seemed out-of-place. The original ending took chances and challenged the reader. This one was more the Mega Happy Ending with Wayne and Garth. Still good - just forgettable.