- Erotic Couplings
- Showers
- Page 2
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Click hereA powerful thrust of my dick made her scream "YES!!!"
My waist was now flush with her ass. I spread her cheeks in attempt to get deeper, slow and long withdrawals with quick and deep thrusts. The pace changes were driving her wild. I grabbed both tits from the sides to help guide my thrusts. She pulled at my headboard. She tried to hold back, but I wasn't about to let her. I wanted to hear her. Our bodies slapped against each other. She pulled the sheets to her mouth to muffle her passionate moans. I took one hand and played with her asshole, never actually penetrating, just rubbing, teasing and pushing. She reached back over her shoulder and grabbed my neck, pulling my chest to her back. I used one hand on her waist to pull her in to me to meet my thrusts, the other hand on her throat to show her my power, my control. In the position we were in, I had to provide short quick strokes, but I made sure she felt every last one of them. I think I pushed her pussy to the limit, because she started shaking and bucking.
Sam leaned into my ear, said "I love you, Daddy" and released a sexy growl as her pussy tightened. Her body exploded, her cum flowed down both our thighs. That's all I needed and I couldn't hold back.
"Baby, I'm cumming too!" I roared and let my dick squirt and spit cum into Sam's love hole. It seemed like an eternity I was cumming. My cum joined Sam's and ran down our legs. We stayed still for a few minutes, and then rolled together. Lying on our sides, I stroked Sam's face, kissed the back of her neck. We were covered in sweat.
"We need a shower."
"You see where showers lead us" and we both laughed.
We closed our eyes to catch a nap. "Oh yeah, I guess I never really knew, but I love you too, Cricket."
"I know you do, that's another reason I came back."
With a slight chuckle, we started to drift off. "Malcolm, next time I'll let you win, so I can I can treat you!"
After a couple hours of sleep and rest, we both woke up.
"Pick a number between one and ten."
"Six," I guessed.
"You're right, you win. I guess it's my turn to treat you. I think we need another shower."
Let's just say, we didn't leave my apartment for the rest of that weekend.
- COMMENTS
AprilSmithSucksabout 10 years agoAlthough I wish I didn't have to ignore the grammar errors, misspellings, sloppy typing, and that sudden "Daddy" line that comes out of NOWHERE on Page 2 (read my other Comment on this page which explains how you can fix that).
Nevertheless, I really like this story. You did a great job of establishing the Malcolm/Cricket dynamic and showing us what they like about each other.
I really like Samantha and the way her behavior (towards Malcolm) combines *sweet & mischievous* with *incredible sexiness*.
I would love to read a Sequel about Sam *treating* Malcolm the day after the 1st story.
Since the 1st story took place on Friday night & Saturday afternoon, I'm guessing it would be Saturday night & all of Sunday in the sequel.
I want to see Sam's sex-appeal get taken to a whole new level in the 2nd story.
You said, at the end of this story, that Malcolm & Sam never left his apartment for the rest of the weekend, so you should try to come up with special/nice (and sexy) ideas for what Sam could do with Malcolm while they're cooping themselves in his apartment for a whole 1.5 days. You already did a great job at establishing Sam's sexiness in the 1st story when she was the one being treated by Malcolm...so now I want to see how she brings out her sexiness when SHE is the one who wants to treat HIM. (And you can come up with sexy ideas for what she can do to him whenever they're spending Real Quality Time and not having sex.) I want to see her BLOW MALCOLM'S MIND (and mine, too)....As long as you don't forget the personality traits that made Samantha unique in the 1st story, so you don't contradict those traits in the 2nd story, then I'd expect it to be awesome.
~William
AprilSmithSucksabout 10 years agoCricket's line on Page 2, "I love you, Daddy" came out of NOWHERE. I double checked and found nothing that indicates she called Malcolm this name before...You should either EDIT this so that:
[A] she calls him something else (like "Baby" or "Malcolm" or "Honey" among other simple options).
...or [B] you find a way to actually FORESHADOW the "Daddy" line. If that's supposed to be Malcolm's high-school nickname, you need to establish it back on Page 1.
~William
Anonymousover 11 years agocould have used better proof reading, but no worse than others. but still great story, very detailed. cant wait to read next story if its as good as this one but hopefully with better grammar
Anonymousover 11 years ago... it could so easily have been excellent if only you had taken more time and done some proof reading!!
There are numerous small, annoying spelling, grammar and punctuation errors!!
For instance - sixth from last sentence - "Malcolm, next time I'll let you win, so I can I can treat you!"
'... I can I can' ...? Sorry, that is just sloppy writing!!
If YOU can't/won't proof read then get someone to do it for you.
Could have been 5 stars but I can only give it three!
