by Erosite
Erosite clearly paid attention in English class, unlike most of the writers on this site, but his story seems dry and lacking in passion. Reading it is a little like watching distant sex through a telescope: you can sort of see what's going on, but nothing engages your other senses. It's frustrating because the writer's proficiency with the language promises much more. Let's hope he tries again!
Sex in this story was missing an element. You could have just as easily beat off watching a fucking video.
That was an awesome story. The swingers I know are also not "tawdry fuckaholics".