All Comments on 'Silver Moon: Bk. 02 Ch. 02'

That multiple wives, polyamory, guess what you're expected to share bullsh!t is beyond ridiculous. It doesn't matter how nice Nara is. She must have been destined for another, and now the spirits give her to someone who is not her mate, doesn't love her, and resents the pain this whole thing continues to cause his second chance mate.

In case you haven't realised it is a story, you know , made up, unreal. Many cultures have multiple spouses, if a marriage is only about sex then it wont work but for proper grown ups who understand the problems and difficulties faced in a long marriage then it can serve a purpose.

Well done Max

Looking forward to the next chapter and curious to see what other trouble Dan, along with his friends and family get into.

I gotta agree with anon..no. nuh uh. i don't think so. comment this is just one step to far. I was happy when he found his new mate and now you have him forced to take a second mate! Plus there was to much of the auditor in this why has he suddenly become such an important part of this tale it just gets more confusing each chapter but I can't seem to stop reading it. lol

Look forward to the next installment..asap please.

Shame on you anon. To presume you know the authors story and what he has planned better than him. Hint he is destiny and fate and all the gods and spirits combined! ! Deep breath. I was going to get ugly but maxd01 saved you from that by giving me a great bday gift.Max I again thank you for sharing your talent. As one who can't write tytyty

For those of you who have found this chapter to much or confusing some of the issues will be straightened out in the next chapter. Having said that if I do focus on one person greater than normal please assume there is a valid reason for it. Usually it indicates that person is going to play some sort of important roll down the road. I am working on the next installment right now and hope to have it submitted by the end of the week.

to leave us hanging, anxiously waiting for the next chapter. Now what devious things do you have planned for poor Dan. BTW, love, love the little spirit kitsunes. I want some of my own.

My guess the auditor is more than a taxation accountant I suspect he is also keeper of the packs records and associations , i'm also guessing that there is to be more marriage affiliations as it goes on as if you follow human history in any great length there is what is referred to a political marriage to consolidate boundaries between countries so I suspect is no different to the scenarios of werewolf's and other supernatural beings..

Yes i know this story is fiction though it is a good read can't wait to the next chapters it is good though it is a pity it is posted on literotica, I think you will have a great future writing books given the current content of the submissions you have supplied, I put you in the same category as lee childs and other novelists great work can't wait to read the next chapters

It is not just you, it occurs in quite a few other stories but more often in yours as you

have a fixation and continually describe what your characters wear. The garments that people wear are clothes - with an "e". Cloths are pieces of cloth that you might use to polish your shoes.

Apart from that, the stories are not bad.

I loved this chapter. Can't wait to see what Dan does to the Red Kitsune tribe. And what rammifications of the Grey Spirit Tribe is going to be fod their cheif's actions.

#1: two, to, too

They're three different words, with three different meanings.

'Too' is used to indicate an addition to something, such as "he hurt his hand too", meaning 'as well'.

#2: Commas.

For the love of Luna and Kurama, PLEASE use more commas. It can be rather difficult to determine the different clauses and groups of words in sentences which lack both commas and proper grammatical construction.

The stories themselves I love, but I cannot give them a 5* rating because of the grammar issues; they're too prevalent to ignore. I can only give 4*.

From Ranike to Dog got your tongue and reading this series I have to say,You are an amazingly talented writer and it has been a pleasure reading the the stories. I look forward to more wonderful stories and new chapters of the current storties when you have the time to write and post them.

You took a great Lycan series with serious possibilities,and turned it into a stupid Hentai story with 3 tailed werewolves,and midget floating spirits. Basically,you made the story a cutesy,childlike story.....too bad all your readers are adults. -BGunns