All Comments on 'Silver Moonlight Ch. 02'

I'm glad you posted more on this story. The story line so far is intriguing. The only problem is the misuse of words (ex. aging instead of again) breaks up the flow and makes the story difficult to read. Please consider getting an editor to assist.

Not as much detail as part 1 but still a very intriguing story. can't wait for you to continue the story.

Hey Ice,

I am glad you came back. I'd have liked to see it get further into the storyline. I think you did a little better grammatically. But, it still was really rough. It was still difficult to interpret and understand at times. Please use the site to get an editor. Ask and maybe someone will volunteer. I've been written to after I left a comment and asked to either read a draft and comment on the story or to edit after it was complete and I was happy to do it. I am sure there are people who will help you. If not there is somewhere on the site you can request an editor. So, before you put another chapter out, get that help. You have an interesting storyline and I'd hate to see the story lose readers b/c of errors that can be fixed. good luck.

This chapter was shorter, in a good way, as we are able to take in more of the large amount of info. Like many other say, the grammar errors stops the flow in the story and maybe looking for a volunteer editor or just someone to read it over would be nice, I'm sure that there are many people who would want to see this story develop on further.

THIS IS ICEWIND125 IM LOOKING FOR A editor OR SOMEONE JUST TO HELP WANT NO BOSSES JUST A PERSON TO HELP MAKE MY WORK GR8. IF UR INTO OR KNOW SOMEONE PLZ EMAIL ME AT SQCSQCSQCSQC@YAHOO.COM THAN U

http://forum.literotica.com/forumdisplay.php?f=9 theres the Lit forum where you can look for an editor i guess? haha i dunno what else to say :P put a post up maybe you'll get responses ^^

this is getting good why did you stop?

THIS IS ICEWIND125 THE AUTHOR OF 'SILVER MOONLIGHT' HI I'M STILL WORKING ON IT, I'M HAVING SOME ISUES ON THE NEW CHs.SO BE PASENT SORRY FOR MY TYPING I HAVE 'ADD' SO IT's HARD FOR ME TO WORK AND I'M TRYING TO FIND A ED' TO HELP ME BUT NO LUCK IF ONE OF U KNOWS ONE OR IS ONE LOVE SOME HELP THANKS FOR READING W/ LOVE AND PEACE

nothing personal but i wouldn't trust a voce in the dark that qickly. o,0

I very much would like to see this story edited and finished. It shows a lot of promise! I hope you can complete it.