by stu4711
No matter how hard I try to ever imagine myself in the idiot son's position, it just does not work. He is portrayed as a loathsome prat who will tell his father...or pimp on his mother...just to get his twisted pleasure.
To tell a tale like that, the writer would have to be a very unbalanced person himself.
In fact, I have no doubt that he requires psychiatric help to fix a very sick mind.
The only thing better than a boy sticking his young cock up his mother's mommy-hole and blowing his young balls up his own mother's cunt is the boy fucking a baby up where he was once a baby. That's the stuff that proud grinning young motherfuckers are made of.
VERY HOT AND EROTIC, AMAZING, AND BELIEVABLE!!!!
Your writing is excellent but your story scenes need to be changed , you have the same scenes and almost the same words , wether its father/dau or mom/son. Thats the only fault, Ive read all your stories and they are way too similar.
Where did she go? and didnt return till late in the eve. Was it to see jack Whoes baby is it?
Very good. My only suggestion would be to say a bit more about Marilyn, how she looks, her face, eyes, hair color and style, how she is dressed, her figure under her clothes, changes of expression, even lighting effects, so the reader can visualize her. A clear image of her makes it more erotic, at least for this reader.
At different times in the story, describe her again, fully nude, in a way that helps the reader to see her after she has been swiven. The contrast between the two images, the cool and classy upper class matron and the nude, incestuously taken mother can be a very nice touch in a story like this.
I think a bit more psychological coercion and resistance from Marilyn, especially the first time, when she realizes that she must become Jason's mistress or risk losing eveything she has gained in life, would have been a nice touch.
Oh yeah; this tale very defintely deserves a sequel, where Jason takes his mother repeatedly during her pregnancy. Make sure she gives him a daughter/sister. This might make Marilyn his sex slave for life.
Dirty bitch cheats on her husband with his brother then gets "taken" by her own son and impregnated, sweet!
Wow, it is so hot, why don't you tell us how she started with Jack too?
The bitch cheats on her husband with her brother-in-law and then her son takes her. A very fitting joining. She got entirely what she deserved!