All Comments on 'Sister-in-law Visits'

You need to reread your story. It could be a good quick one. However, your grammar makes it just quick. Find an editor also.

they need to get to business

Thanks for your story. These people seem inhibited. Too bad for us, but some people are that way. I hope they can break through it.

Maybe this is an invitation to readers for comments on the sis-in-law experience? From my side I can very well relate to that from experience.

I would use my long tongue on my sister in law

It sounds like our guy may be first generation American. They pick up an accent from their parents in their American as they learn it. No worries, NYguy5151, my Mom was first gen American. All my grandparents came over on the boat, in the late 1800s. One side Italian, the other German/ Swiss. I'm from upstate NY. NOW, your story needs more chapters, have someone proofread it for you. We all need our working edited, so I'm not picking on you, it's just in most cases, it reads better.. Keep writing.

XYZ

Started slow and tapered off from there