All Comments on 'Sister Pt. 04'

Better than the stuff they did last time but the whole experience was still a bit too rape-ish for my taste, at least she woke up and they did it the normal way. Too bad they didn't get caught, not that would have been fun to see.

3*

Lots of women have consensual 'rape' fantasies and there is clearly a lot more than just sex between these characters. She seems to be moulding her brother into her Dom and falling in love with him at the same time! This chapter was a quickie but I'm still interested in where you take these two. 5*

I thought the storyline was that the parents were gone on a trip. Did I miss something?

Do you have some sort of bias against using the word "being"? You keep writing "been" instead, which is completely incorrect. You may pronounce being as been, but pronunciation doesn't make it correct.

This is an issue in all four of your chapters. Can you please learn the difference and correct it in the future. Your third chapter was amazing. You have a great concept, good characters, and hot scenes. I see you improving on other areas as you write, but for fuck's sake please stop using been for being.

CINCO ESTRELLAS!