All Comments on 'Sister Sarah Ch. 02'

please keep going, really enjoying these two having a romp.

Liked this story and hope there is another follow up.

One thing and I don't normally mention spelling mistakes in my comments to a story, but these two chapters did have some basic spelling mistakes at critical points in the story. Might be and idea to read through before publishing looks like some of the mistakes are auto-correct spellings.

Oops, should have read my comment properly before submitting.... should have been 'Might be an' not 'Might be and' Lol

It's ok but please get an editor. It's very distracting

Hope you keep up the story.

Can't wait for the next chapter

If you plan to keep writing, and hope to keep readers interested, please re-read your work, slowly, before sending it in. We shouldn’t have to try to figure out what you’re trying to say. A slow re-read will allow you to catch and correct the numerous mistakes before you submit.

in hot stories are your forte...keep going

Hey I think this story its read. Some people are being a little to hear on you. You did make mistakes, but its fine. Keep writing! But, please more than one page at a time?

You must edit better, this is a mess. Good story, but a mess.

Its a great storyline. The editing is so bad at times that it is hard to read. A simple spellcheck won't do, however. You need to get an editing program like Grammarly or you need to get you a human to read and correct.

Desperately needs an editor * Good Story * !

amazing developement, on to the next chapter.

You really need to proof read befor submitting your stories not only words place in that make no sense but in on paragraph you slip his hands under her skirt to play with her and 2 paragraphs later your taking off her pants as you strip her it just makes it hard to follow along with the storie if I have to change yhe wording to make sense of it