All Comments on 'Sisterly Love Ch. 01'

Be very careful with where you take this story. I've read stories that started strong but were crap after that. My advise is simple, going down the blackmail road is very dangerous. Make sure it is planned out and do not try to wing it. You have a good start though. Am looking to chapter 2 though

I liked the story as it was your first submission I read it quickly. How does he plan to blackmail them with no camera. I agree with litfan2418, also.

Yes I agree with everyone else about the black mail . If you have to go that route , what I would do is have the girls call his bluff , he runs to mom and mom kicks his ass out . Oh well just an idea

I really appreciate the feedback thanks this was my first submission I'm glad u liked it.

Good story, but an English class could probably serve you well!

Your story had my attention for a good minute. But just a couple pet peeves that I'm sure you will hear a lot on Lit. The first is characters development. Take a little more time to hash out your characters. It not only adds depth to them, but makes your story better, enabling your readers to invest in them. Second, get an editor. Lit is chock full of people who will proofread your work, so that the myriad of tiny grammatical errors you made will be avoided. Thanks so much for the story, it was overall enjoyable and I hope that you finish it up soon.