All Comments on 'Sister's Affections'

Please DO NOT EVER post another story until it has been proof read several times and edited. I had to quit reading halfway through because of the spelling errors alone.

Writing well is a skill. It is one that develops over time with practice.

Writing poorly can be done by those of the simple-minded, which is demonstrated by this story.

Sooner or later you'll finish high school, lose your virginity and actually be able to write something without making the plot up as you go.

When you post something full of typo's, inconsistencies and with a rambly weird plot, all you're going to get is negative feedback. That doesn't help you as a writer, so only post your best work, and when you think it's your best, sit on it for a month and then re-edit it. Again. Be meticulous, be anal about it. It makes for a much better story.

At the risk of piling on abuse after you've received two critical comments, I need to tell you that this story is far from being ready for publication. As a writer teacher, I wouldn't even know where to begin editing this piece.

See how my own comment demonstrates what happens when you don't study your first draft. I meant to say "writer/teacher."

Then became a total waste of time -- yours and mine. There's sex, of course, but nothing erotic about it.

sorry to say dude but after reading this my opion is IT SUCKS

Try learning some grammar though, mixing up then and than and then editing sentences, leaving orphaned words, makes it a bad read.

Why this site lets idiots write about rape is beyond me. RAPE IS WRONG.

ONE MORE TIME….THERE IS ABSOLUTELY NOTHING EROTIC ABOUT HURTING A WOMAN! THERE IS NOTHING SEXY ABOUT PHYSICAL ABUSE!! If I could I would hang you on a flag pole by your scrotum, and you could show us all how hot you think it is by remaining there until you orgasm. See how much it turns you on, you sadistic barbarian.

you need help