by NaughtySexySecret
And I honestly think I just had an orgasm without even trying. Dev is my dream man. Craving more already!
OK, not to mention being an incredibly hot story it may well be the most well-written submission I have read on this site over the years. I'll be waiting anxiously for the next installment . . .
...this is one of the best written stories I've seen on Literotica. The characters have...well...character. There is humor. There is intelligence. The sexual energy is thick.
More! More! More!
About the only criticism I can find for this excellent story is that some of the paragraphs are a little long. You could break them up for a little snappier read. Otherwise, this story is perfect, with richly-drawn characters, dialogue that is witty and crisp, and not the first typo or grammatical error that I could see. I think the character of Devlin needs to be developed a little further, but I have no doubt that will come in subsequent chapters. All in all, a splendid start; just don't keep us waiting too long for new installments. A 5 with a bullet.
MY 4 WAS TOO LITTLE, YET FELT 5 WAS NOT APPROPRIATE FOR A STAGE SETTING SCENE. WHILE THE DEVILISHLY AND GENTLEMANLY DEV KEYS THE MOVING TRANSITIONS, TRULY THIS IS SKY'S VISION, INTERPRETATIONS AND METAPHYSICAL NATURE THAT GRACES THE MORALITY AND EROTICISM OF OUR (NOW OUR) BEGINNING. this is with the APPROPRIATE THANKS TO THE WRITER(S). (smile)
Very well written, with a well-deserved 5-star vote. Chapter 1 gives us Sky's background and lets us get into her mind a little. Dev's experienced nature knows it is best to go slowly and allow both to revel in the anticipation of the pleasures to come. On to Chapter 2.