All Comments on 'Slaves Next Door'

"former student camed her brains out"? Seriously? Also, way too much use out of ...

I am deeply sorry. English is my second language. Of course, that's no excuse for having imperfect orthography, as "Definately needs an editor" pointed out. I'll be sure to seek editor help in the future.

I do hope you can forgive my half-assed writing and judge Slaves Next Door as a story.

You've written an amazing tale.

Pay no attention to that petty quibble by Anonymous (considering they even misspelled their own comment).

Any writer may have an occasional typo now and then.

This reminds me of Christmas. I got the best gift ever and I played with it for days and weeks and then eventually stopped playing with it because it did everything I wanted it to. It was just me and when the next new toy came out, I left my old insane at done point, threw them all away.

This story is the same. There will always be another toy, a newer better toy and what happens with the old ones? The ones that can't even breathe without being told? What happens when they get to old or broken? Because all toys lose their lustre, no matter how amazing or perfect they were when you first got them.

Great story! Will there be a sequel to it?

That's a really great story you wrote there! I absolutely loved it, and any small typos didn't take away from the entire peice. :)

Thanks for the nice comments It's great to reach such an audience.

I'm not planning a sequel because I think the character arc is fine this way, but I do have an epilogue on my website, which I don't think I'm allowed to link here.

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God Its more Then Good . Keep writing :)

I stayed wet because of her acceptance of being a sex slave

the emphasis on the process and not the result. A few minor plot issues that probably bothered only me: (1) how was Nico so quickly converted and (2) how did they get the girls off the airplane?

When I read these stories I'm often tempted to skip over 'slow' parts, you know? But this tale held me in its grip. Every word. I wanted to experience Heather's evolution. Really nice and patient mental storytelling. There are some questions, but maybe that kind of echoes Heather's experience. I can't say enough good stuff about your writing (regardless of the spelling mishaps). You make being brainwashed believably pretty awesome!