by Goldie Munro
you had me captivated and on the edge of my chair with this.it was wounderful.
The quality of the plot, character development and dialogue is excellent. What a sensual feast! The polar contrast of all the sensory elements combined with the story development and timing build a delicious erotic anticipation and tension that makes the climax unusually satisfying. Emotional, sensual and erotic, this is an inventive and marvelous work.
Gripping.
A new blood on the Literotica, and made self being heard.
That was GOLDEN, Goldie.
I don't usually respond to a Non-Human category story, but this was so vivid, with excellently drawn characters and other-wordly descriptions I quickly succumbed. My entries are completely different...The Mask (funny) and Who Killed Lois Laynes? (murder mystery...I believe currently in New section) Read them if you can! Good luck!
I absolutely loved this story. This is the type of story I love reading, it has everything. It may be in non human but it smacks of romance. It would be a shame if you didn't win. Good luck!
Didn't matter at all. Deftly crafted and a joy to read. Easilly deserving of all the Kudos. Congratulations.
-Colly
Very good story. I loved your use of the sensory elements. The colors, the smells, the light. I enjoyed reading it quite a lot.
Good luck.
This was a really exciting story and very sensual. It's not a stroke story like I usually read but what I would call a page turner even so.
You are, I think, first and foremost a story teller. I really enjoyed it. Please keep writing, I will keep reading.