All Comments on 'Sleepless on the Sofa Ch. 01'

Maybe use an editor in the future so you won't make mistakes like using 'no glue' instead of 'no clue'.

Lol you literally started by saying this was your second language, and someone had to read and pick at it. I could never write this in a second language. Amazing job. There were two or three bits that didn't translate exactly, but it was hot to read. Thanks for the story.

I love your sense of humor.

You have an amazing ability to create atmosphere. Well done.

Nice premise.

But the sex happened too fast. Too abruptly. Needed to be in less of a rush, with lost of teasing his cock close to an orgasm multiple times before they fucked.

Four stars.