All Comments on 'Slight Indiscretions Ch. 01'

You write well. The problem in the story is that mother in law is already there to be taken when story opens. Nothing to conquer. That makes for a bit of a snooze even though subjkect matter and writing is strong.

Oh My God so sexy~! wish she was my mother in law~! and her big ole ( . ) ( . )

I din't usually give that high a rateing to a one pager but this has promis and I do hope you will lengthen the following stories.