All Comments on 'Slumber Party'

for the writers reluctance to include Sis in the fun I think a little incest would have been in order. I

Even so it's still a 5 star fuckfest story.

.as soon as the narrative voice turned present tense. One

Don't be stupid, you missed the porn bit. I keep telling you dorks, this place is for sex, not English class.

Although I think the present-tense detracted from it (for me, anyway).

and to those of you with an issue with this persons writing, i invite you to create a story even an 8th as good as this, and post online for everyone to see. Perhaps then you wont be so tempted to be part of the peanut gallery next time.

you think nobody should give anything but praise to a story unless they submit one themself? Have you never watched a film and thought that some part of it was not to your taste? If so, I certainly hope you did not say so until you went out and made a film yourself!

Just what color is the sky in your world?

Very good story I hope you are doing a follow up I'm curious what happens next

The number of times he came stretched credibility, but I certainly enjoyed it, even though (like ReiDeBastos) I found the use of the present tense distracting.

Can I come and play

nice work! A slower paced tease might add to the eroticism of it but It was an enjoyable read. Thank you!

If all the girls would've been virgins and he actually did anything with his sister, this might have been my fav story on this whole site but as it is, I'll give it a 4/5