All Comments on 'Snowed In'

Needs some polishing and clarification, editing wise.

Nevermind the whole rape, and she's in love with him? Too stupid to evne qualify for battered spouse syndrome

This was so hot! Freaking sexy I want an Eric! Like anon said wit the head bang thing, not cool of him, but I've read worse where the rapist does worst and the girls are stupider. As for the POV, I'm not use to reading it like this and can use just a bit of clarity, but this has so much potential! Maybe a pt 2?

Okay, the base idea for this sounded interesting, but you need to work on a few things.

Using the "you" perspective is irritating. Saying that it is "me" yet I have a name that it mine and all of these responses...

I would suggest an edit. Make it a third person story. This was very difficult to get into.

Also, check your tenses. You bounce around a bit with past an present tense.

the perspective thing was super annoying

but the story is great

Your writing is horrible, the "perspective" makes the narrative difficult to follow. The subject matter is horrible too. Women don't enjoy being raped against their will... EVER!