All Comments on 'Soccer Mom'

I enjoyed this one. It could have been mean, it could have been degrading, but it really showed two people who have found each other and are a perfect fit fro each other. Nice work!

i enjoyed every bit of it so hot and sexy

ty for a great story cant wait for part 2

Excellent story... Please post more!

i loved it , so hot can not wait for more candi

and pleasantly kinky. Thoroughly enjoyable and well worth a second chapter.

cant wait 4 chapter 2 (hope there is more cummimg (opps) coming hopefully candi and the other soccer mums could do things mmmmmmmm

i like where this is going and i want more ,please write another chapter soon

The story was good, but you kept switching from present tense (e.g. verbs ending in '-s') to past tense (e.g. verbs ending in '-ed') throughout the story. It made reading it difficult. You need to pick one tense and stick with it.

You dramatically need an editor. Your story was interesting and pretty well thought out but so many grammatical mistakes, switched genders, and incomplete situations made an excellent outline for a very exciting story a real hard read. You have talent but you need help writing proper grammar prose.

Part 2, what happens with her n the girls