by DocOc
your writing is a bit clinical,as if you're divorced from the material itself emotionally speaking,however all in all it's a solid 3 star story
Enjoyed this very much. The attention to detail was good enough to make the story seem to flow without effort. Well thought out. This could even be stretched out into a book. Thank You.
it felt very rushed though. it was more of a summary of a story. would have loved to hear more detail.