by evanslily
You have a real talent, your story held me from the very first words to the last. I'm looking forward to seeing how this story develops - Well done. :)
I love the way he teased her through out their dinner together. It shows that he already feels very natural and comfortable with her. <br><br>
As the other commenter said, you write very well. Events flowed naturally, proper use of tense and grammar, good description of the exterior and interior of the restaurant. And of course, "Eve's" internal monologue adds a great layer to the whole story.
"The idea of kissing you seems to have shot to number one on my latest list of things to do before I die." brought a little tear to my eye. How romantic.
Great dialogue. Looking forward to the next chapter(s).
I'll be watching this one =)
You have a way with words!
Sarah
I am really liking this story and can't wait to read more chapters. I find I'm intrigued to learn more about both characters and love how he teases her so much - off to reach chapter 2.
You put several published (and popular) authors to shame!
You've painted a picture of two fairly lonely people who found each other through an accidental meeting. The words you've used and the scenes you've portrayed, indicate they already have romantic feelings toward one another. I'm going to be sure to read the following chapters.
I presume there's more interesting activity in future chapters, but you've set the scene very well. Looking forward to reading what comes next.
As is all your work! I really would like to spend a few days with your characters, they are delighful.
I love the way you wrote this. I got the tingles from their kiss too. Great writing.
What a great start! To have a blind date turn out so well... and there is still more to come! Wonderful story & I'm so glad someone special told me to check it out!
Great to have another story from you Lily. Looking forward to the next chapter.
it is just beginning, and I am hooked already.
What a great start. Charming characters and dialogue. I'm hooked. And we've got three more chapters as well as the rest of this author's works. Great.
What a great way to pull me in and make me not want it to end - and be oh-so-happy that it hasn't!
J