by leftist
Can't even get the character's name correct in the title... Jeez...
Story is just not in the least plausible... Poorly structured and written... Bleaggh...
What got me the most was first she had on your boxers then they became her panties don't remember what you wrote?
Very good erotic, sweet story! The title though... fix the name. It's kind of annoying. But otherwise excellent story! Keep writing, just proofread before submitting!
Never read an erotic story like this before, just proof-read before entering next time. ;)
Otherwise wonderful story buddy, keep writing!