by Beau_Jack_Walker
I could barely tell what you were trying to write with your numerous grammatical errors.
Plump women are sexy and they love to fuck (my perception)!
The story was more like a report for the head office than an erotic story.
However i read it because i crave plump women.
3 stars - keep on writing.
A difficult read. Sort of all over the place. Real potential for an engaging story with interesting characters, but it doesn't feel like much effort was put into it.
But the comment before me said it all. (A bit nicer maybe)
You need to work on your writing.
And in the middle , Jack became Robbie , then back to Jack.
That is just lazy.