All Comments on 'Special Dee'

And he could not stop laughing at the idea of a piss and shit bomb.

Neither could I. Very funny :)

Good Story. just the right "suspenseful lead-in... and then the bobmdrops... hahahah

Revenge to the extreme. Loved it. Good job writing this story.

Great stuff, man! I'm still laughing from this one! :D

5 HUGE Stars!

Nicely done! I can so picture that "bombs away!".

Awesome!

Thx

5********s, M O L.

he took the Special D and turned it into a major Offense, TK U MLJ LV NV

Wow great story. Dropping a shit bomb into a 300C (prick car...) while the cheaters go at it is epic. Special delivery indeed....

Top marks for Flavian..

One of the best BTB stories I've read on Lit!

I hope others enjoyed it as much as I did.

BDEarth

But amusing. Poop jokes are always funny.

enjoyed it quite a bit

Enjoyed the story, nice balance of revenge and not going too much over the top. Hope to see followup from Donna's perspective.

I absolutely LOVED the ending. It is also great when the wronged husband can hide some assets.

Simple and direct storytelling. Can't beat it.

filled the balloon with gasoline!

Justifying their actions because of a moral issue. For the slow witted readers, it's the equivalent of killing the guy who cut you off in traffic and then saying "be for what he deserved".

So we have voyeurism (a felony), assault, assault with a deadly weapon, assault wit intent, a potential attempted murder charge (considering an enterprising DA could make the case that using fermented excrement with NO guarantee that the victims would not have any open wounds that could be infected and the potential for parasitic infestation us a whole host of pathogens and virus) throw in the conspiracy charge, conspiracy to obstruct justice and the whole host of FAA rules that were broke which also makes it a FEDERAL case and that's just for starters. You have attempt to defraud by hiding assets and the rest of those charges that have left me mildly angry. Not with the wife, who deserved her divorce; but with the author who simply ignored all rules that inconvenienced him while simultaneously blaming his wife for cheating.

So it's ok for him to break the laws because it suits him; but she got what she deserved? So where's his jail time?

The stuff revenger's dream of. Thanks for writing and give us some more.

So which one are you? The cheating slut or the asswipe chasing married women? Must be one or the other to have so much concern about a relatively humorous revenge.

I enjoyed the story. Loved Enola Gay and ET, what is not to like about those things.

Too bad some folks don't know fantasy when they read it. Nicely done and well worth 5*'s. Most folks know that the REAL fantasy is that the guy came out better than even and not just living in a closet somewhere.

Thanks

for well researched good writing like this. Humor?? Is that a cat? For me kids and crap and brilliantly hilarious revenge plots go down like a flushed gorbit of puke through collapsed and twisted lead piping amidst an asbestos outhouse. Dire and distressing. 2* FOR WRONG CATEGORY.

Your so-called hero is an absolute dropkick cunt who is every bit as evil if not more so than the wife. Disgusting btb crap.

5* -- What a humorous story with cool details! Very nicely done, I look forward to more of the same from you in the future!

Excellent job, this is your 7th story 2posted here on lit.

the shit hit everything but the fan LOL

I just couldnt get behind this story. It was too technical and lacked true emotion, I read the revenge part and there was it was just "bleh". Handled correctly it should have been a hilarious pay back moment.

I suggest more passion and emotion in the future, maybe a bit more exposition on these devices like E.T.

Also a greater burn on the cheating bitch would be appreciated.

Satirical humor is great. Just fantasy, folks, nothing to get upset over. My wife and I both enjoyed it. Husbands are usually royally screwed, so these fantasies are fun to read. Looking for more from Flavian.

Novel revenge idea but story got bogged down in jargon. Not sure where the erotic part was, maybe a different category would suit. 2*

anon 3/24

It isn't voyeurism when someone is fucking in public - it's indecent exposure and their names on the sex offender list.

You, being such a stickler for legality, will surely take up the cause in the wife and her lover's arrest for such an egregious crime.

This was the funniest story I have read on Literotica. I have friend who is into the little helicopters and visualizing the revenge had me grabbing a handkerchief to wipe the tears of laughter out of my eyes so I could continue the story! Thank you so much.

Thanks for sharing.

I read it right through, but then I don't know why. The husband was an awful nasty character, and as for dumping a bucket of shit...Sorry, didn't work for me.

...but only 5 Stars !!...

A Sh!t Bomb LOL

I am sorry but come on, lets get real this has absolutely nothing to recommend it. It is not about any form of erotica, or well written.

Why didnt he just go and deliver the package himself the the story could have been. I Poured the contents of a cemical toilet over my wife and her lover.

That way neither the writer nor the readers would have wasted any time. It might even have got a better score.

A funny story and well worth the plaudits.

However, I can't shake the after-taste of the outraged ex-wife not letting ex-hubby get away with the shitty prank. In addition, I think there may be some kind of law which would take ex-hubby's hidden income into consideration if a shark of a lawyer was astute enough in spotting it.

Any tale which involves a cheating cunt wife and her jerkoff lover covered in shit is an automatic five stars.

OH YEAH

She cheated on him, got pregnant by another man, disrespected him thoroughly, and his big, satisfying revenge? She had to take a shower. Ridiculous. I agree, puerile is a good description of this story.

The wife is a whore and any of you limp wristed sissy boy that are mad at the husband can kiss elephant balls. Good story except for the kid part.

This was a funny story and while technologically cutting edge, quite possible.

The pompousness of the anonymous complainers is just as funny.

I would expect it is not uncommon for husbands to put aside money when they realize their wives have very little financial sense. I also know of women who also squirrel away money because their husbands buy too many toys. That is very believable.

As to his revenge, most of the UAV observations were made in public places so there are no laws broken there. Yup, there was some destruction of property (car) and certainly some minor assault which all together, given the circumstances, might have resulted in some community service hours and perhaps a reduction in his settlement from Dean. Considering that the two sleezeballs had been cheating for years without consequence, this was a very minor, although completely effective, payback.

I'm glad he got the kids but I'm not sure how that happened, even with pictures. They weren't proof of her being a bad mother, only a cheating wife. But he wins and that was satisfying. Heck, his wife got an apartment and some alimony and after a VERY thorough shower was unharmed. So what are some posters whining about? Yeah, he got a bit of extra money. He deserved it.

and a truly "Special" revenge. 5*

But I have to wonder if you just gave the FAA another reason to delay approval of your flying "toys"? And if Donna suspected you might not be the sperm donor for either child, I'm surprised she didn't do a little DNA testing of her own. She could have really stuck it to you if she knew that you weren't the biological Father of one or both kids. I dangerous game you played. But it was fun to read!

A well written and fun little tale.

Actually the cheating cunt will be. Good story, too bad napalm wasn't a viable option. This was an original idea. Five from me.

Saxon Hart

Personally I felt that the punishment fit the crime. Hey gang, who wants to worry about Reality? Let's enjoy ourselves!

Like it very much. Thanks

AMerryMan

FUCK YOU.

Somebody who is on SOL (Storiesonline dot net) that reader should try to read Flavian's story "Biggest and Best". That story will not be here on Literotica.....or with low percentage likely.

A very good Cruel and Modern Figaro Type Revenge story. 5***** To earn the children custody from the Mother is the two steps Revenge.......

Fairly original plot, in my humble opinion. I think Donna and Dean were scum, so in a nice fantasy, they deserve to be dumped on. And it is just a feel-good revenge story, so Anon needs to quit taking it so seriously and just cool it. Of course a scenario like this would never happen in real life, but it's still funny. Waiting for more from this author. Thanks for writing. Four well-deserved stars.

could have been much better with red lines through half of it. The story didn't even start until page 3. Pages 1 and 2 were no more than ramblings about drones. Ugh!

If I wanted to read all about them I'd read a technical manual.

3*s is about the best I could do for this 4 pages of a 2 page story.

@ Anon The writting technic was the play with the 2 drons. The main instruments of the revenge was the 2 drons and the Author showed the ex wife guessed this on the birthday feast. Children bombing with ribbons,,,,,,,,,

Okay, you all know my reputation as a flaming feminazi but damn! This is one hilaristurbingly flatulent fantasy. Terrific imagineering Flavian and I enjoyed the methodical methodology of your writing style. Heck, talk about anal obsessive!

Okay, here's a bonus question for all you ancient farts like me, who actually can remember the using real outhouses for our "necessaries". Including cutting up the Sears catalog for ad-hoc toilet paper.

The question is: What was the difference between an outhouse with a crescent moon cutout over the door and the outhouse with a star or sunburst cutout over the door?

She fit right in with the shit. She really deserved more shit, so to speak.

It is doubtful he would get custody since the children were not involved in the sex acts. He might retain ownership of the house. However, she would be the one to live in the house until the children were legal age.

It would cost two to four thousand dollars but after removal, cleaning, and replacement of the carpet, seats and perhaps some other parts made of cloth, there would not be any remaining smell.

and InComing have any meaning to some of us, TK U MLJ LV NV

Still funny as shit! Definitely an original revenge weapon. As was stated earlier, poo jokes are always funny. LOL

Dumb asses like ken Phillips ruined it for me to. Some how in his little cuckolds world the husband was at fault, along with a few others of cuckold lover union 69.

"The DNA results that said I had not sired this little girl would never see the light of day, if I could help it. I could not know for certain; but, given the way that Donna had insisted on being the one to name her, the probability was pretty high that Dean Winston had impregnated Donna with Deanne all those years ago."

Once again, it seem to me that your making the husband the ultimate cuckold, he is knowing raising another man kid. The wife slaps the shit out of him and he takes it like a little bitch. But I did like the revenge (3.5)

so many jokes come to mind but others have taken that path already. I am amazed at the number of posters who don't appreciate the humour for what it is.

Loved it. Laughed my ass off!

Funny, enjoyable, well written. I can ask for nothing more. Well, maybe more torment towards the ex. There is never enough torment for a lying, cheating, slut whore. Is there?

one slap! Means nothing. Beat the shit out of her- not gonna happen for he is a perfect gents. HAHAHAAA.....

Why does Ken Phillips read almost every BTB story????

I loved it. Well written with a mix of pain and humor that worked for me. The revenge was wonderful, both inventive and mean while being hilarious, without being over the top. And the scene where he was putting his daughter to bed was wonderful. Five well deserved stars.

I wondered how long it would be before drones would end up in a story !

Good tale,..very enjoyable

I don't see why he should have to give her a bigger share of the community property just because he got the house.

The house wasn't part of the community property, and therefore shouldn't have been included in the division of assets.

Yeah I know OUCH - but fuck it - I liked the story -

Yes, a funny story. Would like to have read more about the 2 shit covered cheaters and what they did afterwards, all covered in shit. Like stories where the cheaters lose and the non-cheaters win. Thanks to our 'wonderful' court system (sarcasm), the cheating wife gets more than she deserved. Thanks for a fun story.

The revenge was very funny. It's something you absolutely expect from teenage pranksters so that threw the cheaters off Glenn's trail, for a while at least. Very good story and 5 stars!

and it will stay in the dead letter box at the USPO. TK U MLJ LV NV

This was a great laugh and one of the best stories I have ever read on here.

Too much extraneous data crap that wasn't needed. Two pages (some info condensed) would have made it just right...a good read!

Thanks!

wouldnt mind getting a little more detail about the wife (did she ever love him, feel any remorse, love her kids)

the statue, that's all.

It's not the Judge's choice to give him custody. Child Protective Services would have interviewed all family members together and separately and decided on custody. And She would have definitely gotten custody. She might have been able to prevent him from having ANY time with Deedee since she wasn't his biological child and he therefore had no reasonable claim to her. At the very least she could have used that against him. She would have gotten alimony equal to half the number of years they were married and the level would have been set by a Court formula. She would have gotten child support. If he was LUCKY she didn't get the house to use until the kids graduated. And once she figured out he was responsible for the "shit attack" guess what? She could have gone BACK to Court and had the custody, alimony and child support revisited. He's lucky if he doesn't end up doing jail time on the weekends. So while this was a funny fantasy, the reality is that he would have gotten hosed in Court, lost custody and STILL had to deal with the bitch forever. Remember with 2 kids they'll see each other at school events, every time they exchange custody, when they need to talk about braces, summer camps, vacations, etc. Then comes graduations, college expenses, weddings, grand children and more. SO She is NEVER going to be out of his life unless he deserts his kids and never sees them very often. Ain't life grand?

Just a load of crap LMAO! The story was juvenile and implausible as hell but a good read nevertheless. I gave it five stars rating for the entertainment value.

infantile and tedious

Good revenge

I realize custody cases vary widely by jurisdiction, and in any case are wildly unpredictable, but the biological parentage should be of little concern.

Dee-Dee was born into the marriage, and he has raised her as his daughter for 12 years. It is far too late to attempt to deny him his parental rights. Actual physical custody may have been problematic, but visitation rights are a no-brainer!

That "revenge" was infantile.

Perhaps.

I believe it comes under the YOU SHIT ON ME, I SHIT ON YOU category of what goes around comes around!

Anyway it was unique

It was worth 5 starts just for the revenge dump on the cheaters!

pure wankel. five stars. thank you!

It would only have been better if he had made some comment upon the ex's exit from the party such as; "Watch the skies. Keep watching the skies." (Taken from "The Thing From Another World", 1951)

my knowledge of the tecky side is deficient, but I couldn't see why they didn't see the shit bomb coming, as eg a drone would have been visible and extremely audible. Otherwise an amusing story and worth some good points. It's gets my vote on the humour side alone.

It makes absolutely no sense not to have done a paternity test with the first test when they were young, considering the knowledge that Donna had been fucking at least three others, the guy's gaping naivitee and trust in Donna makes even less sense, any sane person would have been at least a little curious.

Forget all the legal/money aspects. This measure of revenge was hysterically perfect,right up to "The Server's" reactions to the stink on Donna.

a BIG 5+ ,with a SPLAT!

A 6* if he posted and emailed the videos to her and Deans coworkers, family, and friends.

In any case, it was an explosive crappy outcome for two cheaters.

Great Story; but the bad guy obviously has money. Assuming he is Dee-Dee's Dad he could be on the hook for back child support payments. The math would be something like $500/month times 12= $6000/year times 12= $72,000.oo. That's not "chump change". So let's add a second chapter; He turns in his Chrysler 300S in for a used Hyundai. Donna the bitch then has to beg to come home as her "Sugar Daddy" is now "Sugar Shit".

11/5 He was such a stinker.

Five. One of the most innovative stories I've read on Lit

Why did he have to pay for Donna's apartment and why was he giving her alimony,she earns as much as he did.Also why on earth did he not tell her he knew about Deanne.?

One of my all time favorite revenge stories. This took tech knowledge, imagination, and writing skill to bring to fruition. In short, she crapped on the marriage and he crapped on her.

Why no child maintenance back money from Winston and why did he not tell his cheating wife he knew he wasn't DeeDees illogical father.?

Sorry, I couldn’t help myself in the title comment. This is the first story I have read using the eye in the sky for a Loving Wife story. Nice idea and the story was well developed and written. I now wonder about the old adage, “It all comes out in the wash”? Sorry, once again. Top marks from me.

Why did he not tell Donna about DeeDee not being his biological child?.

It's clear to me that he thought that if the info of Dean being Dee-Dee's bio-dad came out, then he would stand a chance of loosing her, so he kept quiet and didn't sue for child support. Maybe after she turns 18...

Again good plot. I would wonder what else was Indian guy recording when he followed the main hero and his wife without disclosing this ahead.

This writer is a capable plot constructor, it would be nice for him to team up with a more capable writer or editor. Too bad he seems to be gone.

THe fact he loved his special DEE and did not want possible trauma to happen in his relationship with her obviously is why he kept it to himself

But at his age it should have been extremely painful to the recipients as well. And when the bitch slapped him, that was assault and self defense would definitely have been justified. Nice plot, much too techno wordy, and way to wimpy a hero for me. Sorry.

Hilarious, so funny. The cheaters deserved every bit of that stink bomb and I think it's a perfect way to BTB. He was so proud of that car and now it will forevermore stink. It won't even matter if someone can actually remove the stench, he'll always imagine he can still smell it, thus, no more bragging about his car. Thanks for posting.