All Comments on 'Splitsville - Alternate Ending'

Getting all three girls knocked up twice was really hot, and having his sister as a third wife was hot too.

It was sad that Ron had to die, but it was probably the only way the storyline would work out to where he had his sister as a wife.

Thanks for the second ending.

I like this story but the first one is better.

Definitely prefer the original ending.

I liked both endings.

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it would have been better if no ron so he would not need to die and the 4 could be together

This says Alterntive ending - I can't find the original ending can somebody direct me to it?

Thanks

since there is no fist story by this writer he must have stolen this and changed the end to suit himself which is illegal it is called FELONY PLAGERISM.

Interesting. Couldn't find the first one listed, but I did read it and enjoyed it. Maybe they will repost the first one that started the story,

Its not stolen. looks like he did a re-edit

with half a title change over top the first

version instead of posting separately.

Odd way of doing it but eh what

ever makes him happy...

I have read both stories and they are by the same author while you can no longer find the original in his listing I got to it by going to http://www.literotica.com/s/splitsville and as you can see it is the same author

I read them both! As it stands the second is the better, but, it also seeme like an additional chapter was attatched. To be a mreal comparison, how about another chapter to tie up the strings of version 1 ?

For what it's worth... I gave both versions a 5 STAR rating for the wordsmanship. Good concept and an obvious effort to "Get5 it right."

My vote is for the Alternate. Both are good stories. Thanks.

....the rest of those pathetic manipulative sluts featured in some many of those wimp ass efforts. Wantwhiteboys and fags like MattM to mention a few.

Both stories are fun, but the second ending seemed more complete. Makes you want to buy a lottery ticket!

For the folk on the other side of the very big ditch, namely the Pacific Ocean, my comment of 'you beauty' is not a compliment regarding the author's appearance but a sincere compliment for a job well done.

I much preferred the second ending, you rascal, you knew that most of us would do that. Generally I want the author to write the ending but in this case I will make an exception. What really kills me is when an author just leaves it open and tells the readers to finish it as their imagination demands. I hate that. Thank you for writing.

it was ok but giving the bitch ex $500,000 was just plain stupid and no guy in their right mind would ever do it. it got much into the group sex thing which was a turnoff and takes away from the true love feeling it should have. to have TRUE LOVE it means never needing or wanting anyone else EVER. with three girls it would be too easy for one or more to get mad or hurt and blow the whistle on the others.

Great story. Really enjoyed it. Too bad you had to kill Ron off. I understand why but still...

but very clunky story

Really $250 million lottery win Really & make a big deal about giving Ron $5000 for his initial loan really!!!

Wins $250 mil or $175 mil with that you could buy NZ !!! #lol

I liked both story endings although, like other commentators, it is sad that Ron had to die to make this ending work.

I noticed that you had made some other corrections (primarily to make the maths work more sensibly) but the glaring error remains where the two girls are rescued from from the family home and Donna complains about the captain groping her and Julie (should have been Beth).

Some as the others sad about ron but understand it, could have let ron live but the boy accident keeped and had retired and moved to the lake and still get the bro to have sex with sis, but not sure if it be better

A good story. I truly enjoyed it. AAAAA+++++

The revised ending definitely was a better storyline as it brought a happily ever after to the whole family. Eleven kids, wow that is one big family. Story was well written and had a great conclusion. Well done 5 stars.

(I2/19/2023) This ending was much better. Babies gotta have more babies. Nothing like a pregnant woman walking around the house barefoot while only wearing your dress shirt. But I also need to say that I would have liked to have read more about Shirley and the captain. More substantial villains would have made for a sweeter ending. Still, I gave this narrative five stars.

Liked this one better - though Ron probably didn't have to be killed off. Poor bastard. Suggestion for future stories: take it a tad slower. Felt a bit rushed in places. A bit rapid fire / staccato. For instance: why were the twins so down to get down with dad in the first place?

Both was too much to grasp only good part was the sister and brother action and sister and niece action but was killed with the mention of anal sex told me the mc is gay also killed it with daughter and dad incest