All Comments on 'Stalking Amber Ch. 01'

A great story to start my day with. I was so excited to see your latest submission on Lit. Yours is one of the very few stories worth reading. Thank you, thank you, thank you.

Can't wait to see where this goes, I hope he gets her pregnant.

More more more

Please please please continue!

Thank god a story finally worth reading!

Are you going to finish your first story?

I wont rule out a continuation, but for now Simon and Sandra are indefinitely on hold. I left it open ended b/c TBH I'd stress about ppls responses to the direction I'd take.

Another teaser from Bellie.

Another fighting heroine

Another asshole of a guy.

Do you need me to suggest a possible ending ...( huge grin )

That's 5004

Wheres BBC to back me up :-)

Ps...welcome back xx

Hah. Thanks MJ. That had me grinning :D

Thanks for the positive comments all, much appreciated. I deleted one unhappy anon b/c their feedback was more bizarre than constructive.

Wow, this is, ugh, this is perfect.

Are you planning to make a series on this one? Cause that would be super nice :) ;)

Keep on writing, you do very well!

do not bother about negative or useless feedback as if someone wants to be unkind the easiest thing is to just not read it ... I personally loved it and cant wait for the next chapter hurry up lol xxxx

one of the best i've read. LOVED IT

Please continue, sooo hot

You have an essentially good writing style. A few minor typos here and there, but it was, overall, a good read. Worth at least a 4*, if not a 5*.

I can see that this may be continued in form of a series. You can do it, by all means, but please, please and a thousand times please, do NOT drag the storyline. Then it'll become tedious and boring.

Thanks for sharing. If you need any help in form of beta-reading your stuff, you can contact me via my Private Feedback portal in my profile.

Keep writing.

Bard

I really enjoyed reading this. It was very hot! I love how you took your time with the build up, and the fact that it is well-written is another plus. Definitely looking forward to more of your stories. Thank you for a great read!

Thanks for all the great feedback!

I just wrote this as a quick 'palate cleanser' to refresh my mind between writing chapters for a different story.. Given the encouragement, sure I could do a second chapter, though Bard was on point about the potential for it to become too drawn out - it's not a story I considered continuing when I started it. But then again neither was my first so... we'll see :P

I'm not a big fan of rape stories. I thought this was reluctance not rape but it turned out differently. Should have put a warning at the start.

Very good.

More please. Really love this one. Make it into series.

Um, HELLO IN THERE???????

sheezus, how long ya gonna make us wait, anyway? Although I would like to know what a "singlet" is... a camisole?

WE'RE DYIN', HERE!

Haha geesh sorry! I've finished ch2, but this time a second pair of eyes will give it a look over before I submit. Shouldn't be too long. I never expected the story would generate this much interest!

This is an awesome story. I would love for it to continue. ;)

This entry has hooked me(it's what made me look at your other stories, the writing is that good) and I hope that you continue this piece. It'll be too sad for it to just end here! Stories on here with actual plot and development are the best and keep me coming back for more. Please consider this to be a series ^_^

She had a chance right at the beginning and chooses to believe her abductor? He promised to take her home? Too stupid - lame story.

Just a little late to the party, but I got your back ;)

Bad man, feisty gal, oh what to do, what to do....

We got ideas ;)

Let's not rule out Fred just yet.....

Am not sure how she could dress with a chain attached. It would pull down anything that she has on unless it's a light chain but that would be easily broken. As far as the character Brad trying to break her. Logically, Fred would move on at some point. So, the character Brad could let her see videos of Fred on a date with someone else. That would remove her last emotional stronghold.

Stacks of smoke and straight up the middle. We can give a full on frontal assault and have him pinned down in a sec...job done.

Ps...do I get to shag her as a reward for rescuing her ?

Lol BBC and MJ. Such schemers :P

Anon - I apologise. That is one big mofo of a plot-hole that is beyond plastering over. Forgive me ;) I know people like to comb through for realism, but when I write, the sole focus is fictional fantasy. Otherwise, I'd have an editor go over my writing. I'll endeavour to have submissions looked over in future.

I did consider the 'show her footage of Fred with another girl' element, but considering they were happily living together, Fred isn't going to hook up with another girl less than a day after his partner goes missing. And frankly, Brad has been a little too busy with other things to stalk Fred.

You certainly can create bad guys ;)

MfulJ, are you military? You def know your strategy(!)

And us guys never forget a good pincer movement.

A Bellie sarnie is def on the cards

Never leave MJ. I'm still laughing!

This is quite realistic of a story you've written, one of many favourites of mine now, this fiction is impressive! How he made her disappear in her daily life is VERY convincing that its scary, packing her stuff up, further intoxicating her boss and then her jobs resignation, such ingenuity! No one will find her, less there is some substantial evidence of foul play, other than that she is just another runaway! I love it! Such character! However you forgot about her cars disposal...pay attention to detail!

- M1dn1ght

Haven't read any stories in awhile after I got into a couple good series and this happened to catch my eye. Glad I found it! It left me dripping. Love both characters! Can't wait to read where you take this...

Really nice

I hope by the end she gets to kill this fucker.

I'm late to this one having just found this jewel today.

I'm so glad you chose to continue . . . and finish this story.

I love how you built up Amber's resistance as Brad tried to destroy it. I also love that Brad is so slow in taking her and keeps pressing her to beg. Simply delicious.

Very nice job, Bellie!

- J

Funny

Though, I think he should kill himself.

BEING NAMED AMBER THIS IS FANTASTIC OH MY GOD

I always find these kinds of comments funny. "Kill him. I hope by the end she gets to kill this fucker." and "Kill him - seconded. Though, I think he should kill himself."

Which makes me wonder, why are you reading NonCon if you don't like NonCon?

5 Stars. Looking forward to the rest.