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Victoria watched as the car left the compound. She had an evil grin on her face. She had allowed Adrian to go with her son for the honeymoon. Let him enjoy the little time that he had left. Once he comes back he'll be in for a big surprise. No matter what, Victoria has to separate Nicholas and Adrian and he was gonna unite him with Jake.
Adrian was going for some time right? Well Victoria and Jake had a plan up their sleeves to make the boy...uncomfortable. A big surprise was waiting for him. Once he returns it will be game on!
Victoria chuckled, breathing in her future victory. She smiled like a villain, turned around and began heading in the house.
What surprise awaited Adrian? Will he finally be thrown out or will he be stronger?
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Thank you for reading this chapter. I hope and trust it was interesting and fun. Drop your comments and votes below. Chapter four will be posted very soon and I assure you it'll be really interesting. This is just the start. Stay tuned...
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 6 years agoSorry to offend but the translation of this story from your own language is appalling and is making it impossible to read anymore as it is becoming increasingly hard to follow... total drivel...
josranvictorover 6 years agoofcourse you own me dear with that i wish you could take me vanalas
you the fuck make fall in love with you just by writing SORRY
Anonymousover 6 years agothe best at this site ever
i would lyk to request u to make adrian brave.Plz dont seperate the two of them
make adrian stand for love as the title
dont make him suffer much again,no rape,killing atleast another thing
if at all adrian and nick are mad at eachother,make them reconcile in avery romantic way
am looking forwad to seeing jake being slapped by adrian
wish you the best as u're the best of this site
OH HERE IS MY HOT 5 OF ALL BILLBOARD HOT 200 GAYLOVE STORIES
1.FOREVER YOURS[F.Y ramarc*complex]
2.STAND FOR LOVE[adrianick]
3.DESTINED LOVERS[geohenry]
4.THE PRINCE AND HIS PAUPER[castonio]
5.MY ROOMATE THE FUCK BOI[theocallum]
damn u vanalas for ruling my billboard
WE LOVE YOU
canndover 6 years agoHe should tell Nicholas about the threat or it will be the old Nicolas is all happy bc mom blessed him and their plan goes down s and when he tries to tell Nicholas whay she said he won't believe him. Maybe Nick will surprise us bc he does adrian. I was aggravated with him when he was planning to marry Jake even after he found adrian left to die!
kelvinvictorover 6 years agoI agree with most comments here ... Especially that Vanalas is one of the best storytellers on the site. I find myself looking for the next chapter or story eachday ... I also think that Forever Yours is possibly the best, though this has great promise.
I have mentioned about using an editor to proof read the text and make sure that it scans correctly in the past and still feel it would benefit not only the story, but more so the author as well. Simple name checks, and errors are easy to correct, the editor should be the author's friend.
Anonymousover 6 years agoPlease get an editor. It's clear that English may not be your first language, but that is irrelevant. This story has potential but with all the grammar mistakes and the constant repeating of the same thing over and over, it's a two star story at best. Your idea is great, the delivery is terrible. I know you are looking to improve and sometimes it takes a second eye. At least read it aloud to yourself before submitting it, does it sound correct? Do you feel like you keep repeating the same thing over and over again?
NADA0713over 6 years agoI hope you will not play with Rape again and why the law never comes to play with your stories its just suffering for the poor guy ,you're a good story teller thou!
Anonymousover 6 years agoenough....Enough my fellow readers,dont demmoralise my writer
try to put your self in his/her shoes,would you manage to write awhole of this minus amistake??
We just have to guide our good writer and make him the best at the site is that fucking much????
Any ways vanalas to me you're ever the best,those 3 stories of yos rule my billboard with forever yours[F.Y] on top
i finally breathed when these two made love,u almost annoyed me by keeping us waiting-sorry-
i really want it to be as good as F.Y
Please make it more damn hot
we love you
Anonymousover 6 years ago5 pagestory clumsilydragged out to27 pages. Ma y, many problems because the author did not even bother to proof read it and correct the countless errors and mispellinGS.
Anonymousover 6 years agoThe public comments are as confused as the author of the story! !
A great story but too many mistakes between the characters plus numerous grammatical and spelling mistakes. Please find a proof reader the quality of the story deserve more careful editing.
