All Comments on 'Star Quest Vol. 01 Ch. 00-01'

I'm sorry but this is Terrible.

Seeing you have already been slammed by an Anonymous critic I thought I would comment. You have started a world building project here, with a few hints about the society these people are in as you go. No instant sex which is a relief from boredom and the common fantasy. You have my attention and I hope this shows it's promise.

The story doesn't flow well. The world building doesn't make sense either, 30,000 AD but they still fight with sword and bow. The protagonist is an unimaginative white knight, 'seeing a woman injured made my blood boil'. Try to add more depth without rushing the story along and have the progtaonist have bad qualities as well, it makes them more relatable.