All Comments on 'State Park'

It's jeans not genes. Also Maddie on page 1 turns into Maggie on page 2. Just two minor annoying points but otherwise good.

I can't wait to read more but getting an editor would help with the distracting spelling issues.

It's midriff, not mid-drift; on purpose, not on porpoise; straight, not strait; khakis not kackeys.

Loved the idea and hope you do continue.

I have to agree that an editor would greatly improve your story, but please keep going.

Thanks for your hard work!

Doc

I was interested all the way through! The spelling issues don't bug me as much, but if you're doing this as a career, an editor would be the way to go, keep it up.

Anon.

Enjoyed the story! I hope you'll do a sequel, you have created interesting characters.