All Comments on 'Steam'

of some! Very different. Very good!

Interesting approach. Unfortunately, wasted on the LW crowd. You should look for a different outlet .. in Literotica, better to post a story like this under 'erotic couplings'. You may still get a few comments about 'wrong category' (although, the couple doesn't need to be married for the content and style to work), but overall the comments would be more balanced and mature.

And agonizingly sad.

And interestingly different.

It reminded me somehow of Khalil Gibran.

Lue

I enjoyed this approach. What is left unsaid--the negative space--is intriguing.

Oh yeah, and ignore the trolls :D

Carefully written.

Beautiful.

Realistic.

Thank you!

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Good work. Could easily qualify as prose poetry.

I'd have marked this piece of experimental writing with a 5* rating.

There's eroticism, love, lust, misery, hopelessness and helplessness, too.

And all in a smoking jacket of good quality prose.

Thank you.

Well written and extremely erotic. Love the style and the way you paint a picture with your words. Thank you for sharing

Love the aspect of this genre that has the wife confronting her husband with her affair.

good story of a wife standing up and telling her husband about her affair

Who's baby is she gonna have the dumb hubby or the guy that gets to use her body for fun

The comments are half the story. I didn't think of just a single affair. This was to common for him, but "we just started trying", confirms this

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Nice vagitaty...

to offset the asshole of LIt's 1 vote.

a lot if expansion of what this was about and how they got there

The problem with writing such a clever, intellectual piece is that it requires concentration to get the most impact from its story. It is possible this is a good tale of an ambivalent cuckold. However, the extra commas and words, the missing and misspelled words require too much time and effort to determine the worth of this effort. I would like to read a cleaned up version, because it seems to have some merit. If this author gets this done, I hope to see that version. BTW, I try to overlook the grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, particularly of the stroke stories. Some of my favorite authors, even with editors, have multiple errors. One seems to have a greater love affair with commas than he does with his precious muscle cars. Yet, this is my first post focusing on the writing mistakes. Most stories are still readable or not worth the close scrutiny. I often find myself skipping large chunks of material with little loss of comprehension. It is only because I am intrigued by the style of this that I put this much time and effort into this comment.

I really do hate wives like this, but you told the story in an interesting and innovative way. It was good story telling, but I truly hate the story you told. Maybe that's additional proof that you told it well.

WTF did I just skim?

Too disjointed for me to follow.