All Comments on 'Stella's First Incestuous Encounter'

the confusion (name of John or once, Tim) or who sat on whose face.

At one point John was called Tim, and Julie "moved over Julie's head and sat down on her face. John watched her violently grind her pussy against Stella's mouth." Shoulda proof read it for content in addition to spelling.

proofreading aside, it was a good story with a little different angle than most incest stories. keep up your writing!

I'll have them corrected as soon as possible. I guess that should teach me to use an editor again, the next time around.

It was good until the bff started acting crazy. I stopped reading after that it not my thing. "I'm telling your dad" really thats the best you can do. Like her dad would believe you over her with no proof. Especially if the girl just tells him she just trying to get back at me for not being her friend anymore. Cause that all she'll have to say if her dad is dumb enough to believe some next chick over his own kid.

If you are going to have them smoking weed, then do it. Don't say they are smoking weed, then transition into smoking a Hookah, which is what is used to smoke Shisha, which by the way, is only tobacco flavored with fruit.

John, Tim? Julie sitting on Julie's face? Come on, man. You can do better, I hope. Spend some time on it. Think before you speak.

it was decent until the abuse.

I can see the excuse for the blackmail, but all of the additional humiliation and abuse after Stella started on John seems like it was motivated by something less altruistic than Julie just trying to get her "best friend" involved with her half-brother. Once Stella started and John admitted that he thought she was the most beautiful girl in the world, the two of them were inevitably going to get together. Yet Julie was, if anything, even more vicious and cruel to Stella after that point.

Julie sucks. Stella needs a new BFF. And maybe she ought to start off the kicking of Julie to the curb by slapping the shit out of her a few times, just for the sake of balance.

Good story, though. Definitely interesting.

Alright, errors are corrected, thanks again for pointing them out. I appreciate feedback (negative or positive) regarding the general construction and plot of the story as well, so keep it coming if you're so inclined. Enjoy your fantasies! Enjoy true love!

Great story add another chapter