All Comments on 'Step-Dad Screams My Name'

There is no incest in this. He did not raise him. Tyler has some serious issues and is a typical piece of shit. He just raped his mothers husband and doesn't care about either. Who is he to make rules in their house. They moved in with Andy. Return the favor and then throw him out. And really no lube or prep and your supposed big dick just went into his virgin ass and fucked him? You'd be going to jail and him to the hospital. I love Dom Sub stories with men. THis reads more like how a serial rapists starts

it not incest !! it's a gay story. i think it was hot . i was taking by force the first time i was fuck at 15. the man that turn me out that day was 55 years old . some would say i was molested . but i was not . i suck my first cock at the age of 7 swallowed cum that same day . my uncle molested me at 7 by the time i was 14 i was hook on sucking cock and swallowing cum . i was force on my 15 birthday by my best friends dad to take his big cock in my boi pussy as he called it . it hurt like hell but as he fuck me it felt better he fuck me into a bottom bitch that day . just like the step son did to his stepdad he fuck him into a bitch and the stepdad love it

get your characters in lline. Confusing and so amateur, is andy the dad or the son? He switches roles TWO TIMES

PLEASE PROOFREAD

Ik it's not incest and I didn't advertise or write it as such. The editor's note is from the site. In fact, I noticed a few things were changed by the editors. Sorry guys... oh well. I guess it was to be expected since it git sent back to me 5 times. And yes, it's a complete work of fiction just like all of my stories.

the tempo of the story is too fast

you mix around in your narrative, here you switch from Tyler telling the story to Andy at many point i question if its Andy speaking or Tyler or what narrative you write in "Hey, Tyler breakfast is— shit." Andy said swinging the door open and quickly covering his face with the side of his face as I covered my junk with the towel. "I'm sorry. I didn't know."

"That'll happen when you don't knock. What? Did you figure, Tyler has been making fun of my little dick for the past week so it's only fair to see what he's packing?" I respond sarcastically.

Who is talking to who? or is it tyler thinking that. it is very confusing. Tyler and my is the same person when you talk as being Tyler.

then we come to the sex which already is commented on. You go from nothing to fuck Andy with no real reason why, is Tyler gay? he uses no lube nothing which makes the reader think "have you ever had sex"? and if you have please do never do it like that "you will send the man to hospital and pretty much also end in jail doing that". Last but not least 6 inch cock is not a big cock it is pretty average. I can only give this 1 star