All Comments on 'Still Waters Ch. 05'

I hope Deacon can convince Olivia to wait. Why Tia had to reveal she was a hooker was awkward, but all is well. It seemed as if she could have just welcomed her in the family instead of blurting that out. I love your writing, and can't wait to read more.

Yet it lacks some depth. The subjects you discuss are good thought provoking issues yet it doesn’t evoke the emotion from me that are really top level story would do. I don’t say this to discourage you, more constructive criticism.

On the erotica subject I would like to see more in depth sex scenes, after it’s why we are here and it adds a deeper emotion to the story, more of a connection. I don’t connect with any of the characters.

Again the story line and the direction of it are good, keep that and most of all, keep writing!

Great to wake up to a story of yours... A bit rushed... it could use a bit more detail and depth. I like the direction this story is taking. The subject of abortion can be a touchy subject but one that needs to be discussed. As far as the sex scenes??? Yeah, they can add flavor to a story. But most of life is not about constant sex. And I usually skip over the scenes if the story is well written. Keep up the great work, :)

I agree with the others, this was a bit rushed. However, I think that Olivia should've talked to Deacon and her parents instead of handling this all on her own. I understand what it's like to see disappointment in your father's eyes. Once her father found out of her plan he should've taken her to the side and had that talk with her about his experience. What's wrong with his mate? I mean, why didn't she clarify her question to her daughter? She wasn't just asking about if this, moving back home, was what she wanted or was it? I am so upset with her parents.

Ms Evangeline and Ms Tia ... That conversation they had I think was necessary for her to relax and understand that everyone has a past. It could've gone further though.

I'm eager to find out how everyone comes out of this, especially the fathers. They love their children.

I didn't think it was rushed at all. Every pregnancy isn't expected in theses stories. I loved it!

As always, Thank you for sharing your stories with us. Thank you for continuing to express your feelings, thoughts, and desires through your wonderful story telling. This one was short as you warned. But I think with the powerful emotions here it was just long enough. Hope you are well and I await your next chapter with hope for these wonder peoples future.

DJ